When describing a dance, it works well to:
first saying something you noticed about the choreography in general terms
followed by specific descriptions of a few seconds of the movement that support those claims that include the 3 component descriptions from Lesson 1.
replace the word movement/motion/move with specific descriptive or active words.
Here are some examples of this kind of writing, please watch the clips and then read the sample writing. Notice the paragraphs start with TWO general sentences followed by TWO sentences with specific descriptions of the choreography including 3 component descriptions to support the claims.
Swan Lake Pas de Quatre (small swans)
Bolshoi Swan Lake – Pas de Quatre Small Swans (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FY4Y1gTO9HE)
In Swan Lake, the dancers prance swiftly from one side of the stage to the other with incredible precision. They almost seem to be one person in the way their bodies are so in sync. For example, at one point in the piece, the dancers briskly flick their feet to their ankles while almost gliding from right to left. Because their hands are firmly grasped and their heads bob crisply in perfect unison, their bodies seem to blend into one lovely creature.
Amelia performed by La la la Human steps, choreographed by Édouard Lock:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SCHrzakA5X4 (Links to an external site.)Links to an external site.
Amelia is particularly compelling in its combination of quickness and stillness. The dance seems to alternate between the two, and the speed with which the female dancer is able to perform the intricate choreography makes the sudden stillness-es that much more startling. The woman’s hand flicks and dabs abruptly against the mans chest while her directions change quickly as he turns her torso. This is contrasted by the abrupt stop she makes in a broad low lunge by bending crisply at the knee with her arms raised to the position of an L.
Label this section: PART ONE
For the following clips, you will write a description that contains TWO sentences that are general statements that describe your overall impression of the dance, and TWO sentences that describe a few seconds from the dance that support the general statements you made including 3 component descriptions.
(Note: each entry should INCLUDE THE TITLE and be ONLY FOUR sentences long as demonstrated above.We are practicing being specific and succinct.) Remember to capitalize the first letter of each word and italicize the title of the dance, and name the choreographer.
1. Water, Part 1, Dance Film by Keone and Mariel Madrid
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hFLrUOxAyu4 (Links to an external site.)Links to an external site.
2. D-Man in the Waters, (excerpt) choreographed by Bill T Jones
Alvin Ailey: D-Man in the Waters (Part I) by Bill T. Jones (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FZg_q3CDNOM)
3. Movin’ Out (excerpt) choreographed by Twyla Tharp
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7hgzw5spUxc (Links to an external site.)Links to an external site.
4. Heaven, (excerpt) choreographed by Rennie Harris
5. Rich Man’s Frug, choreographed by Bob Fosse
Rich Man’s Frug – Fosse (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=i-HDIMF344Y)
6. Appartement (excerpt) choreographed by Mats Ek
silvie guillem smoke.wmv (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pNal9PlKPLs)
7. Meyer (excerpt) choreographed by Alonzo King
Alonzo King LINES Ballet’s “Meyer” (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=w0JYh2hoy10)
8. Walklyndon choreographed by Robbie Barnett, Lee Harris, Moses Pendleton and Jonathan Wolken
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=V4f3lCnQdQA (Links to an external site.)Links to an external site.
9. Desihoppers, World of Dance Finals 2015
Desi Hoppers 1st Place Finals | FRONTROW | World of Dance Finals 2015 | #WODFINALS15 (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fm3fcOmbzWI&index=4&list=PLTO5ldoX-F2LsZkVTqNIf-A9t5wwmCD1L)
We have practiced supporting general claims with movement description. Now we are going to practice creating a specific perspective in the form of a thesis statement by comparing two of the clips to each other.
Below are 3 sample thesis statements that compare two of the video clips to each other. Notice that the statements are saying something really specific about the two pieces. Professional Custom Writing Services from the Experts!
1. The choreographers for D-Man in the Waters and Water, part 1 both use clear dynamic choices in the movement to reflect the dynamic changes in the music for each piece so that the viewer “sees” the music in the dancers’ bodies.
2. Although both Rich Man’s Frug and Meyer contained many moments when the dancers’ arms unfurled successionally, the gestures in Rich Man’s Frug stayed close to the dancers’ kinespheres, while in Meyer, the movement reached far into the space.
3. I noticed that the choreographers for Walklyndon and Movin’ Out created choreography that seamlessly combined athletic solos with equally strong partnering sequences.
Label this section:
Create 3 specific thesis statements that compare two of the video clips to each other.
Discussion Forum Rubric
+1 point for accurately following the 2 general sentence 2 specific sentence format (if the entries go past 4 sentences, you will not receive this point)
+1 point for thoughtfully constructing 2 sentences that clearly describe a moment or two from the dances that includes 3 component descriptions (body part, verb, adverb)
+1 point for how well the movement descriptions support the general claims. Make sure that if you talk about how the choreography utilizes the concept of level that the descriptions of the movement support the idea (the dancer rolled to the floor then jumped high into the air extending fully through her arms) rather than using a description that is unrelated (the dancer ran quickly across the stage while shaking her head violently)
+ 1 point for creating three specific thesis statements about how two of the pieces compare to each other.
+1 point for thoughtfully responding to another student’s post
= 5 points maximum
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